tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564671139031882281.post4615133475042450285..comments2023-05-14T02:40:39.148-06:00Comments on Scorched Amalgamation: While Standing in Line at the Post OfficeMr. Allenhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/13801415700353288327noreply@blogger.comBlogger1125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7564671139031882281.post-53824335917075231452008-12-28T23:25:00.000-07:002008-12-28T23:25:00.000-07:00I like this one a lot. I like that it starts one ...I like this one a lot. I like that it starts one place and moves to this quiet moment. I feel like it isn't striving for something it's not. The words don't ring too loudly as poetry.<BR/><BR/>I do wonder at the line lengths though. I feel like they are cut arbitrarily at times. I wonder if longer line lengths would serve to make more complex meanings.<BR/><BR/>Good stuff. I'll keep going through your other poems. We need to trade via email. You should send me three poems you're working on or you want looked at.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11828187100384490849noreply@blogger.com